Power of Respect
12/19/2019
The Power of Respect
If you respect, respect will follow
make improvements, not excuses. Seek respect, not attention. ~ Roy T. Bennett.
Respect leads to happiness. When I respect people, and people respect me, my life is always happier. Respect has helped me many times in my life when I am going through bad times. Some examples of this are the times when I came to school after having something bad happen to me and they will be kind and respect me to get me happier. One day after my family and I lost someone close during the school year. I knew it was going to be a hard day. When I got to school I was sad and no one knew that, and I thought that it was going to be the worst school day ever. During the first period which was math my friends were very respectful, kind and funny during the period, so I forgot about what even happened. once I got to third period they all were treated me with respect and kindness which made my day way better than it would have been. Throughout most of the day I forgot about how sad I was earlier and tried to enjoy it as much as possible. This shows how important being respectful is because you don’t know what someone is going through at the time so if you are respectful then it will make their day better. Like how my friends were respectful to me on that day which made it so much better. Also even if the person isn’t going through something sad in their day it is always better to be respectful to them because it still makes their day better. Respectfulness is one of the most important qualities of a human because it can get you places unlike being disrespectful because no one will want to be around you. In life when you are respectful to others respect will return back to you.
I really enjoyed your reading, and it was well written, you described the scenes very well, good job.
Posted by: Jack Doherty | 12/20/2019 at 05:45 AM
like how the story flowed. Very good job jack!
Posted by: Benslayer12 | 12/20/2019 at 05:57 AM
I really liked how you describe the scene in the story. Great job Finn.
Posted by: Kal | 12/20/2019 at 06:05 AM
Finn, I really liked how your smoking gun tied in your theme so many times. I also liked how in your head and heart you reflect on what made you feel better and happier, and then you transition to reflect on how this is the way you should always treat people because it will always make them feel better, no matter what.
Posted by: Gabriel | 12/20/2019 at 06:07 AM
A story is always better when it uses the theme when it supposed to. You used your theme multiple times during the story and was in the right moments. Your smoking gun and heat and heart really described the experience well and made me reflect on how important respect is. Well done Finn.
Posted by: Chad | 12/20/2019 at 06:14 AM
Finn, I liked your broad theme and narrow theme. You describe the scene in a very intestine way. I also like you conclusion because it connects with your whole story.
Posted by: Dereck Then | 12/20/2019 at 06:16 AM
Finn, I really liked how you were repetitive with you theme. I faintly remember this day and how nice people were to you, good choice for a story.
Posted by: Will Hatten | 12/20/2019 at 06:18 AM
I liked how well written your essay was, and I could tell you carefully edited this because there wasn’t any spelling errors, and very few grammatical errors. I also liked how repetitive you were with your theme. It was like you always came back to the same theme. Overall, good essay.
Posted by: Willie Belle | 12/20/2019 at 06:25 AM
I really liked your opening and concluding sentences. They fit together with the rest of the paragraph well, and they were all written very nicely. Also, I liked what you wrote in your head and heart.
Posted by: Mark | 12/20/2019 at 06:29 AM
I had a similar experience losing my dog, and I can relate pretty well. Very well written too.
Posted by: Drew Callen | 12/20/2019 at 06:33 AM
The chronological order and the detail of how you say tour friends treated you make the essay easy to read. The final two sentences wrap up the essay really well. You have some small grammar mistakes, but otherwise a great essay.
Posted by: Kevin Yuan | 12/20/2019 at 06:34 AM