Topical Essay
Tough Task

Narrative Story

 

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“Sometimes you will never know the true value of a moment until it becomes a memory”

 

It was August 18, 2019. A day every cliff jumper lives for. It was a hot sunny day, beads of sweat were rolling down my forehead. The breeze in my hair. The bus, running over potholes, the smell of exhaust in my nose. 

My whole cabin hopped out of the bus. We all looked up at the mountain ahead with rocks so jagged and trees so tall. We were looking for this ravine with a 30 foot cliff with a river of clear blue water below. Nobody had ever seen this so-called ravine before and we were skeptical at the beginning but we were going to try anyway. 

We started the hike looking for this ravine. Looking for hours and hours as we passed by tons of wildlife and plants. We had been looking forever and hadn’t come close to any water whatsoever. So we started to head back down to the bottom of the mountain. But then I saw this path that we hadn’t walked through yet. So we tried one last time and started to head down this path. It was a long path and was a hard walk. Lots of people fell on the stumpy rocks. 

It took some time but when we finally reached the end we had made it to the ravine. The brown and gray colored rock throughout the whole ravine, the blue and crisp water looked beautiful. 

We hiked to the top and ran across the bridge and went to the other side. Then, I climbed to the edge. As I looked down it seemed far and I was scared. I asked my friend, Doesn't it look scary Jack? I didn't really want to do it but I knew that it would be fun. Even though it was scary, it would all be worth it in the end. So I took off my shirt and threw on my pink flamingo bathing suit and stepped to the edge of the cliff and looked at the sharp rocks below. It looked terrifying but I leaped and my stomach dropped. I started to flail my arms. I was scared out of my mind.  Then my feet hit the water and my body felt a sense of relief. The water was cool and crisp and the waves were splashing against the rocks.  I swam to the nearest rock and climbed onto the slippery limestone. I looked above me to see tons of my cabin mates cheering me on. “Yeah! Great job Aiden, way to go,” I made my way back up to the top through the bushes and thorns. As I reached the top I ran off the cliff and tried a backflip and it went wrong. I over rotated and my back slammed into the water. As I resurfaced and took a peek at my back it was bright red like an apple. 

After we all jumped off multiple times we decided to go explore the area and swim around the river. And we came by a rope swing. The long and black rope hanging from the large oak tree was calling our names. We ran over and all took turns swinging off this little ledge into the river. It wasn’t easy, that's for sure. The rope was slippery with the wet green algae which made it hard to grasp and swing. However; I managed and learned pretty quickly. 

 It was my first time rope swinging and it was a ton of fun. I was terrible at it but then after a few tries I was doing flips and having a blast. I wish life was always like this. Not a care in the world doing whatever you want to do. But everything comes to an end no matter how long it lasts. That’s the sad part but as I say. Live in the moment and cherish everything. 

This was one of the greatest things I have experienced in my life. The funny thing is my parents weren't even there. It’s been 5 years and I'm still holding onto it. I remember the exact day and the exact moment of everything. So it must have been pretty special. 

 Walking by the wet rock, memories on top of memories.

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Jack

Great job Aiden. I really enjoyed reading this essay and I thought you had a lot of great essential details. I also like the quote you picked because I think it matched perfectly with your theme. Well done

Luke

Great job Aiden! I enjoyed reading this essay because you did a great job describing the event in detail. I can also relate to the story because I was very nervous to go on the aqua zipline at caribou, but after I did it, I was glad I did. I also liked the simile you used to describe your back. It painted a clear picture in my mind. Great job!

Alexander Murdough

Aiden, this story was quite relatable. E very summer my family and i go to Greece and there are many great days for cliff jumping into the clear blue water. I can definetly relate to being called into something like a rope swing. You were detailed, descriptive, and did a great job on your story.

Pete

Aiden, your story was super relatable because I also go to camp and I went cliff jumping with my cabin. I thought that you described each scene well with awesome details especially when you wrote, “As I resurfaced and took a peek at my back it was bright red like an apple.”

Tomas

Aiden, you did a great job, I really enjoyed your description of the jumping rocks, and the rocks around the jumping area. I also liked your conclusion, your conclusion kept me thinking.

Justin

Solid writing, essay. You could have used some more dialogue to elevate the story, but you still did a good job painting the picture without that. Your conclusion was interesting and something I had never heard before so it left me thinking.

The Fenn Voice

This essay is a living tribute to the power of memory and experience. It brought me back to my days as a wayward daredevil jumping off bridges and cliffs in the white mountains. It could use a bit of work proofing and formatting, but it is still a great story well told!

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