Empathy
02/23/2020
everyone is the same on the inside. I saw how horrible and kind some people can be in this world. I loved hanging out with my “uncle”. He is not really our uncle he is just a extremely good family friend that we called uncle. He is also not the same race as me, he's black. I love my uncle and would always stay at his house in up state New York. I usually called his by his first name, Bernie, rather than uncle. We loved going to Friendly's for breakfast. The problem with going there is the owner was pretty racist. That particular morning he wasn't the same. He was acting different we wouldn't let us out of his sight. This wasn't one of the first times we had been there. We ordered our food and are with no problems. The problems started when we finished. I had gotten up and was heading to the bathroom when the owner grabbed me and pulled me to the side. As a 7 year old kid i was exactly scared. He started asking me all these questions about if i knew Bernie and if i felt in danger. It only took two questions before Bernie came in and saw how scared i was. He grabbed my are and said “we got to go, i don't want to be here anymore.” As we started to head out we noticed police storming in and rushing right at us. They tried to arrest bernie but we convinced them that he didn't kidnap me and i was ok. The employees also stepped in and helped us out. The way he had just stepped in and didnt doing gradually was awful. He had just assumed that because he was a different race than me he MUST have kidnaped me. I think that there needs to be more empathetic people in the world. There are too many bad people in this world and not enough good ones.
This story was pretty crazy considering this happened to you and Bernie was almost arrested, yet I understand how this probably happens pretty often.
Posted by: Drew Callen | 02/23/2020 at 04:22 PM
The story was entertaining to read and I like how you explained your moral in the end well from transitioning from your story.
Posted by: Finn hudson | 02/23/2020 at 05:50 PM
This story is amazing, as something this crazy happened to you. The story was well written and transitioned smoothly. The ending was slightly too harsh, but delivered the impact extremely well. (although I enjoy the cynicism). Maybe you could end with: “there are many good people in this world, but there aren’t enough who display it” or something like that.
Posted by: Kevin Yuan | 02/23/2020 at 06:27 PM
It was great to read it was very descriptive and clear, and so many things were happening but you put it all together very well. Though, one thing you could correct is at the very beginning capitalize the first letter.
Posted by: Jack Doherty | 02/23/2020 at 09:17 PM
The story was very entertaining and fun too read. Great job
Posted by: Chad | 02/24/2020 at 05:14 AM
Your opening sentence really hooked me into the story, one thing that you could’ve done is capitalized the first letter of the story, other than that I enjoyed reading!
Posted by: Will Hatten | 02/24/2020 at 05:23 AM
Sorry to hear about your good friend Bernie, I hope he food was good. Great description.
Posted by: Andrew Crofton | 02/24/2020 at 05:27 AM
Nobody likes to be discriminated against. The man didnt do anything wrong but because he was of different culture he was wrongfully blamed.
Posted by: Benslayer12 | 02/24/2020 at 05:28 AM
Your opening sentence is really good. You could’ve capitalized the first letter of the story to make it look better, but everything else was good.
Posted by: Willie Belle | 02/24/2020 at 05:43 AM
This story was quite interesting, and you wrote it well. I especially liked the opening and concluding sentences.
Posted by: Mark | 02/24/2020 at 12:25 PM