Power of I
04/29/2020
I live a good life. I live a life with 2 loving parents. I live a life with a nice house and good friends. I live a pretty lucky life. I am a kid who got really lucky at birth. I got lucky with a loving family and not living paycheck to paycheck.
I live a life of lies. I live a life of “I’m fine.” I live a life of “I’m not hurt.” I live a life of “ill just walk it off.” I live a life of ER visits. I live a life of angry doctors asking why I didn’t listen to them and hurt myself worse. I am a kid who won’t stop. I am a kid who doesn’t care about pain. I am a kid that hates writing these because my brain says to write these things but I feel like I’m bragging about oh I’m so tuff. I hate that. But I act before I think.
I am a kid who does what’s best in the moment. I am the kid who can bend his left thumb past 150 degrees. All because I didn’t want to leave the game. I am a kid who broke a shoulder in the first quarter and finished the game without complaining all because I didn’t want to look weak. I live a life of walking through the hand shake line with broken fingers and wrists. I live a life of lowering the shoulder on a kid bigger than me when I have a broken shoulder. I live a life of showing no pain. I live a life of slap shots and body checks with a completely torn bicep tendon. I am going to read this in the future and hate that I wrote this. I am a very selfless kid who doesn’t like talking about himself. But always writes about himself and hates it.
I am a kid who lives by the words, pain is temporary. Well it is pain is temporary and winning is forever but that’s not true. I never remember all the times I’ve won a game or tournament.
I really liked your third paragraph where you talked about how you didn’t like to write that paragraph because you are a unselfish kid and I really liked your ending, nice.
Posted by: Finn hudson | 05/01/2020 at 08:39 PM
Overall this was a very powerful and well written writing piece, I really liked the first three paragraphs and especially liked the conclusion where you closed it out. Nice job.
Posted by: Chad | 05/03/2020 at 01:50 PM
This was a very good piece because you really talked a lot about your life, which is what this assignment is supposed to be about. Good job
Posted by: Drew Callen | 05/03/2020 at 02:52 PM
Great job. This writing makes me feel like I’m reading a book, reading the introduction of the protagonist. Great essay.
Posted by: Kevin Yuan | 05/03/2020 at 06:46 PM
Nice writing, the beginning was really good. This piece was also a very powerful, and it had flown well when I had read it. Great job with this writing and the end really hammers it home.
Posted by: Jack Doherty | 05/04/2020 at 06:00 AM
Wow! This is the best writing piece I’ve seen you write Kal. Your attention to detail, your sticking to the theme, Insane piece Kal.
Posted by: Will Hatten | 05/04/2020 at 06:50 AM
I especially liked the last two paragraphs. They closed the piece well, and were written pretty nicely too.
Posted by: Mark | 05/05/2020 at 07:04 AM
This is a winner. It is a great prose piece that works like a poem that ebbs and flows and risers out of common words into uncommon insights and realities. I agree with others that this is one of your best writing pieces.
Posted by: Fitz... | 05/07/2020 at 05:01 AM