School
Chores

Power of I

I live a good life. I live a life with 2 loving parents.  I live a life with a nice house and good friends. I live a pretty lucky life. I am a kid who got really lucky at birth. I got lucky with a loving family and not living paycheck to paycheck. 

 

I live a life of lies. I live a life of “I’m fine.” I live a life of “I’m not hurt.” I live a life of “ill just walk it off.” I live a life of ER visits. I live a life of angry doctors asking why I didn’t listen to them and hurt myself worse. I am a kid who won’t stop. I am a kid who doesn’t care about pain. I am a kid that hates writing these because my brain says to write these things but I feel like I’m bragging about oh I’m so tuff. I hate that. But I act before I think. 

 

I am a kid who does what’s best in the moment. I am the kid who can bend his left thumb past 150 degrees. All because I didn’t want to leave the game. I am a kid who broke a shoulder in the first quarter and finished the game without complaining all because I didn’t want to look weak. I live a life of walking through the hand shake line with broken fingers and wrists. I live a life of lowering the shoulder on a kid bigger than me when I have a broken shoulder. I live a life of showing no pain. I live a life of slap shots and body checks with a completely torn bicep tendon.  I am going to read this in the future and hate that I wrote this. I am a very selfless kid who doesn’t like talking about himself. But always writes about himself and hates it. 

 

I am a kid who lives by the words, pain is temporary. Well it is pain is temporary and winning is forever but that’s not true. I never remember all the times I’ve won a  game or tournament. 

 

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Finn hudson

I really liked your third paragraph where you talked about how you didn’t like to write that paragraph because you are a unselfish kid and I really liked your ending, nice.

Chad

Overall this was a very powerful and well written writing piece, I really liked the first three paragraphs and especially liked the conclusion where you closed it out. Nice job.

Drew Callen

This was a very good piece because you really talked a lot about your life, which is what this assignment is supposed to be about. Good job

Kevin Yuan

Great job. This writing makes me feel like I’m reading a book, reading the introduction of the protagonist. Great essay.

Jack Doherty

Nice writing, the beginning was really good. This piece was also a very powerful, and it had flown well when I had read it. Great job with this writing and the end really hammers it home.

Will Hatten

Wow! This is the best writing piece I’ve seen you write Kal. Your attention to detail, your sticking to the theme, Insane piece Kal.

Mark

I especially liked the last two paragraphs. They closed the piece well, and were written pretty nicely too.

Fitz...

This is a winner. It is a great prose piece that works like a poem that ebbs and flows and risers out of common words into uncommon insights and realities. I agree with others that this is one of your best writing pieces.

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