The Power of Respect
12/20/2019
It takes forever to earn, and a second to lose
“Family, ooh, ahhh, family”
-fitz
Respect takes endless years to earn, but only one sentence to loose. Over my 13 years of life, I have tried and tried again to build up respect, and when I finally get it, it jumps out from my grasp. This year, shockingly enough, I had a good streak, and my mom and dad respected me and trusted me, I spent months attempting to build it up, I tried as hard as I could. One sleepless night on my phone messed all that up. Everyone has had a sleepless night, if you disagree your lying, also, everyone has had someone respect them at one point. It feels very good, especially when your parents give you respect even though they know you procrastinate beyond the possible limits. The clock struck twelve. Not really because I have a digital clock, but still, the witching hours were soon to be upon us we still have a good three hours, but they go by in a flash. If you don’t know what the witching hours are, look it up, I don’t believe in that sort of thing, but, I had to make a bland story sound okay. Back to my room. I was practically dying of boredom, and I was not yet tired. I decided in a hurry that I would get my phone to pass time. I don’t think I have ever heard stairs creak so loudly, and my mom is the lightest sleeper you will meet in a million lifetimes. But we made it. Morning came around and the inquiry started, where is your phone, let me see it, ETHAN! The respect was gone faster than you could say pineapple does not belong on pizza. This story was very important in my life, because it taught me one of the most valuable lessons anyone can ever learn. Listen to your mom if you ever want to be able to do anything. Also it showed me how respect is worth more than a short period of freedom. If you can, keep the respect you have, no matter how much it is, try to keep it, because respect is a very powerful thing.
You went deep into one experience which is great. This very relatable as I did the same a couple weeks ago. It is very true that you can respect someone for a while, but you can always loséis , and write about that really well.
Posted by: Rory Kennealy | 12/20/2019 at 06:01 AM
I don’t know why lose it auto correct to loseis but I meant lose it
Posted by: Rory Kennealy | 12/20/2019 at 06:02 AM
Your paragraph gave me a good laugh. The similes were my favorite part by far. I liked the one where you compared respect to pineapple on a pizza, which clearly is not right. You interacted with the reader, and made it a much more enjoyable story.
Posted by: Max Merhige | 12/20/2019 at 06:04 AM
I loved the tone of this story, and how you hid a few jokes throughout the paragraph. The broad theme was well written, and it directed the focus of your paragraph in a great way. It is true that we have all had restless nights, and being bored late at night isn’t a good feeling. I loved this piece, and great job!
Posted by: Jamie Book | 12/20/2019 at 06:12 AM
You have chosen an incredibly thoughtful theme. Respect is definetly hard to obtain, and hard to maintain. You get this point across perfectly, with the ingenious addition of humor. I love the expanding and narrowing that you used in your subtitle; very unique way of writing it. Great Job.
Posted by: Oliver Ali | 12/20/2019 at 06:38 AM
I though you broad themes was amazing; it described, and even portended the direction in which was going to take. I also appreciate how you incorporated humor in you writing, and with that alleviated my time on this exam.
Posted by: Yoni Ghansah | 12/20/2019 at 06:39 AM
I really like how you built up respect with you parents and you let it all fall down. Take this as a learning lesson, get back up and build up the respect again this time hold on to it and don’t let go. If you mistrust your parents and lie to them, they won’t respect you.
Posted by: Colin Soukup | 12/20/2019 at 06:42 AM
I loved all the relatable connections you made to let us readers feel connections, and how true it is that one bad decision can ruin everything. I did notice however, that your should be replaced with you’re, but overall this was a great read.
Posted by: William O'Malley | 12/20/2019 at 06:45 AM
Your use of humor was great in the story, because it kept the reader engaged ready for more. I also liked how you connected with the reader, and you wrote as if we were having a conversation at times. Good work overall1
Posted by: Dylan | 12/20/2019 at 07:53 AM