The Great Ride
09/27/2019
An experience worth remembering
”I can accept failure, everyone fails at something. But I can't accept not trying.” -Micheal Jordan
Over the summer I went on trip to Montana, on this trip we were planning a mountain biking trip. I was very anxious for the day we would do this. On this mountain biking trip we would bike all the way up to the top of a huge mountain then go back down. We got these cool bikes that had all sorts of functions, such as a way to lower the seat while biking, these bikes were really neat and I was really excited to use them.
At the beginning of the trip I was confident, I knew I could do it! We biked about a mile to the base of the mountain and already I was feeling beat down from the heat. Then we saw the pathway, it was incredibly steep, my heart stopped and I looked at my brothers expecting them to be as frightened as I was. But instead they just said “let’s do this!” We started biking, the beginning wasn’t too bad, if you changed to your lowest gear you could do it. But you would still go very slow, all of a sudden there was a hole in the trail, i tried to avoid it but instead I fell off the bike.
I tried lowering the seat but I was never taught how to do it on these bikes. I just overheard the guide telling my parents about it. I couldn’t get on my bike, I was beyond frustrated, my brothers were far up ahead of me. It wasn’t until my dad came a few minutes later and he fixed the bike for me, he told me to not get frustrated, and just think of how fun going down it will be. I wanted to walk back down the mountain I was so mad, but my body was just to tired to get angry. Instead in my mind there was only dirty thoughts. I walked the bike up to the stop in the trail, my mom, brothers and guide were waiting for us.
I didn’t say anything I just followed them up the right path, this time I tried biking again. I did better than I did before and got up the mountain smoothly, but the last stretch was painful. It was steep uphill for 500 feet, I thought my legs were going to fall off. Finally we got there, I let my bike down and walked to the viewpoint, it was the best breeze I have ever felt. The elevation was 6,220 feet. The view was beautiful we took a family photo and we all got incredible pictures. It felt extraordinary to be at the top looking at all the mountains in the distance, it was one of the best summits I’ve ever seen.
The way down was a breeze, we zoomed down the mountain dodging rocks and holes, it was a blast. I learned that things can be hard sometimes, but you cant give up. At the beginning of the trip I was mad and grouchy, but after I heard some words of wisdom from my father. I conquered the mountain. It took us two and a half painful hours to get up the mountain, but only twenty easy minutes to get down.
This was a significantly hard mountain, and I’m eager to try more challenges.
I really enjoyed the sentence: I was so mad, but my body was just to tired to get angry. You used really good descriptive words as well.
Posted by: Max | 09/27/2019 at 11:26 AM
The part where you were left behind by the rest of your family and your brothers was very descriptive, and it reminded me of a time where almost the exact same thing happened to me. Well done.
Posted by: NIck Brady | 09/28/2019 at 04:17 PM
Great Story! I can imagine the frustration of having to wait. I enjoyed the structure of the story, very interesting. Hope to see more pieces like this.
Posted by: Will | 09/29/2019 at 07:38 AM
I can only imagine the pain your legs were in
Posted by: Rory Kennealy | 09/29/2019 at 08:15 AM
Not going to lie, I never truly learned how to ride a bike. I found it courageous that you were even able to ride it up a mountain let alone that steep. Well Done!
Posted by: Yoni Ghansah | 09/29/2019 at 10:53 PM
I like how instead of saying that your entire journey was unicorns and rainbows, you included the struggles and obstacles you faced along the way. Great writing, Colin.
Posted by: Oliver Ali | 09/30/2019 at 07:18 AM
I really like this entry because of your maybe brutality honest entry, showing that life isn’t easy. I also like the vocabulary you used. Good work
Posted by: Dylan | 09/30/2019 at 09:01 AM
Wow. That feels like something that I would really enjoy! I like how even though you felt you couldn’t do it you pushed yourself through and the end result was awesome. Good job.
Posted by: Sean Leahy | 10/10/2019 at 04:58 PM