Commenting on narrative stories
04/23/2020
This weeks stories were fabulous I feel like every student went above and beyond on there work. And for the many narrative stories that I read, there were a few that really stuck out to me. Whether it would be the students incredible similes or images on action these students stories are spectacular.
To start off I think that Oliver Ali did a great job on this assignment. His story was about how his neighborhood couldn’t get together due to the virus. And how they still hung out in other ways and spent time with each other. This was so wholesome and happy. I actually smiled while reading this due to the joy out brought me. He started with a opening about how much fun he’s had with his neighbors, then he completely changed the mood to gloomy and sad, because he couldn’t hang out with them anymore. But then he lightens it up and tells us about how they resolved the issue and had loads of fun. This was amazing to read and it was an awesome story.
Next I’d like to talk about Dylan Fayerman’s story. His story was quick and simple but even though it didn't have many words an paragraphs, it made up for it with his creative and exciting writing. His story was about how he went exploring in his backyard and found an abandoned building and construction he described the scene he saw, mentioning countless parts about the structure painting the image in my mind. He did research and found evidence of the building and what the building was for. But my favorite part about this story though, was how he didn't drag the beginning out for a long time. And go it straight to the point and made it a quick, fun, and easy read.
Commenting used to be super annoying for me. I used to dread having to read stories for hours at a time. And I think the reason that I hated it so much, is that we used to be not as good. I used to complain in November and December about how hard it was to read these stories. But I think the reason that commenting is better and much easier for me, is that we’ve improved with our writing; so I’ve liked reading the stories more. It’s hard to do a good job on something if your don't like it, or think its boring. But now that a lot of us have improved tremendously on our writing talents, its been much smoother for me, easier for me, and more fun for me.
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