The power of I
04/28/2020
What I was, What I am now
“I will never speak to you again!” I said in my deep, angry voice with rage. I didn’t want to witness his despicable plans, his hurtful comments, and his damaging lies. He has caused me so much pain, I felt like a wounded soldier, begging for help. Yet no one would help; for I had nothing in this dark world besides him, but he was gone.
I laid on the grass looking up at the sky, it was about to get dark, and the sun was still giving a bit of light at the bottom of the horizon. I stared at it imagining that that light symbolized me, and I had that much hope left inside of my rotting self. And even though I’ve gone through so much, there is a little bit of light shining inside me. And now I’m ready to start my life back up again. Ready to kick ass and start over again, rebuild my self from the shitty place I’m in right now, plug myself into a charger and get to 100%. That is what I want to do.
Wow! This is such a beautiful piece and literally brought tears to my eyes. As Robert frost once said: no tears for the writer; no tears for the reader… I am glad you are back on the horse of life.
Posted by: Fitz... | 04/29/2020 at 08:35 PM
I love how deep and emotional this piece is. The first paragraph is amazing. You used a lot of very good techniques. This is probably one of your best essays yet. Incredible job.
Posted by: Eli Zahavi | 05/03/2020 at 08:30 AM
This piece was amazing start to finish Colin. Even though I didn’t know the context I could see and feel the emotion
Posted by: Max LG | 05/03/2020 at 12:08 PM
Wow, I full-heartedly agree with the things that everyone else has said here; a truly incredible piece. You used the "I" technique just as Fitz probably imagined it, in a way that doesn't make itself obvious but keeps this piece powerful and alive, and it makes this a pleasure to read.
Posted by: Nick Brady | 05/03/2020 at 02:08 PM
Wow Colin. This was a very impactful writing piece described in less words than you would expect I piece with this much emotional context to require, and you did it beautifully. Great job!
Posted by: William O'Malley | 05/03/2020 at 10:19 PM
Great job exploring and reflecting on the low point in your life, and how you came back from it. It’s great to hear that you’re ready to kick ass again. Great job!!
Posted by: Jamie Book | 05/04/2020 at 05:08 AM